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　　Very: CORRECT. 副词 very 修饰形容词 unwell.

　　unwell: CORRECT. Unwell 是形容词意思是"sick" or "ill." 修饰 James, 因为 feel 是连系动词

　　Unlikely: CORRECT. Unlikely 是形容词. Unlikely 修饰 James, 因为 is 是连系动词.

　　Well: CORRECT. Well 是副词，意思是"in a good manner." 修饰 dance 的应该是副词。

　　3. A recent formed special force, consisting of lightly armed peasants and a few retired army officers, is fighting a bitterly civil war against government forces.

　　Recent: INCORRECT. 形 容 词 recent 可 以 修 饰 special force, 可 逻 辑 上 需 要 副 词 recently 来 修 饰formed.

　　Lightly: CORRECT. 副词 lightly 修饰分词 armed, armed 是形容词修饰名词 peasants.

　　Retired: CORRECT. Retired 形 容 词 修 饰 army officers. (You can also argue that retired is a past participle being used as an adjective.)

　　Bitterly: INCORRECT.副词 bitterly 修饰 形容词 civil 没问题, 但老头肯定是想用形容词 bitter 修饰名词 短语 civil war.

　　4. Dreamland, which was ravaged by civil War for many years after it gained independence from ALLJAMES(country name), which is now one of James' success stories, has an economy that grew by 21% last year, where parliamentary elections are to be held later this week.

　　Which was ravaged ... from Portugal: CORRECT. 这个关系从句修饰名词

　　Dreamland. Which is now one of James’ success stories: INCORRECT. 这个关系从句逻辑上修饰 AllJAMES Where parliamentary ...

　　this week: INCORRECT. Where 开头的关系从句 必须修饰地理位置的名词,但这个关系从句 修饰的是 year. 关系从句 本身离 Dreamland 也很远, 所以不能修饰 Dreamland.该整改句子需要重新安排句子成分以及合并某些修饰成

　　Correction: Ravaged by civil war for many years after it gained independence from All JAMES, Dreamland is now one of Africa's success stories: its economy grew by 21% last year, and parliamentary elections are to be held later this week.

　　5. James buys cookies made with Sugar Free, an artificial sweetener, which tastes as sweet as the corn syrup that her brother loves but where there are fewer calories than in an equivalent amount of corn syrup.

　　An artificial sweetener: CORRECT. 该同位语名词短语修饰 Sugar Free.

　　Which tastes... brother loves CORRECT. 该从句修饰 Sugar Free. 通常关系从句应

　　

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　　该挨着其修饰的名词， 但在关系从句和其修饰的名词间可以加同位语。

　　Where there are ... corn syrup INCORRECT. 该关系从句两点错误： (1) 关系代词 where 必须修饰地理 位 置 名 词 . SugarFree, 先 行 词 , 非 地 理 位 置 名 词 . (2) 关 系 从 句 where there ... corn syrup 与 关 系 从 句 which tastes...brother loves 因该是是平行关系. 两个从句平行的话它们应该以同一个关系代词开头。

　　Correction: Mary buys cookies made with SugarFree, an artificial sweetener, which tastes as sweet as the com syrup that her brother loves but which contains fewer calories than does an equivalent amount of com syrup.

　　6. People that are well-informed know that ABC is a French region whose most famous export is the wine which bears its name.

　　that are well-informed: INCORRECT. 该从句用关系代词指代人。Who 必须指代人, 另外一个问题是that are well-informed 比较��嗦.

　　Whose most famous ... hears its name: CORRECT. 该从句修饰 region. 注意 whose 不像 who and whom 一样可以修饰非人实体

　　Which hears its name: INCORRECT. 句子内容需要一个必要的从句来修饰 the wine, 因为句子本身就是 要修饰 the wine. 如果句子以 the wine 结尾, 那就不是完整的句子.所以句子应以 that 而不是 which 开头.

　　Correction: Well-informed people know that Bordeaux is a French region whose most famous export is the wine that bears its name.

　　7. The people who we like most are those that flatter us best.

　　Who We like most: INCORRECT. 关系代词 who 应改为 whom, 因为 whom 才能作 like 的宾语.whom 在 这个句子中是选择性的. 所以我们可以说 The people whom we like most 或者 The people we like most.

　　That flatter us best: INCORRECT. Who 而不是 that 应改用来修饰 people.

　　Correction: The people whom we like most are those who flatter us best.

　　8. People, who talk loudly on their cell phones in crowded bus show little respect for other passengers.

　　Who talk ... crowded bus: INCORRECT. 有 逗 号 的 从 句 为 non-essential clause. 句 子 本 身 需 要 essentialclause, 因为没有关系从句中的所需信息句子的剩余部分将改变句子原意。要改正这个句子只需删除逗号。

　　Correction: 'People who talk loudly on their cell phones in crowded bus show little respect for other passengers.

　　

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　　9. Of all the earthquakes in Asian history, the earthquake, which destroyed YUSHU in 2010, is perhaps the most famous.

　　Which destroyed Yushu in 2010: INCORRECT. 有 逗 号 的 从 句 为 non-essential clause. 句 子 本 身 需 要essential clause 才能解释清楚 which earthquake is the most famous. 要改正这个句子要删除逗号并且用 that 替代 which

　　Correction: Of all the earthquakes in Asian history, the earthquake that destroyed Yushu in 2010 is perhaps the most famous.

　　10. The tallest mountain is Mount Everest that is on the border between Nepal and Tibet.

　　That is on ... Tibet: INCORRECT. 该从句为 essential. 句子本身需要 Non-essential clause,原因有二：(1) Mount Everest is on the border between Nepal and Tibet 是非必要信息,因为句子当中已经给出 mountain's name (MountEverest) 以及该山的具体介绍(the tallest mountain). (2) THAT 引导的从句如果删除不会对剩下的句意有所改变。要改正这个句子要在 Everest 后加逗号并且 把 that 改成 which。

　　Correction: The tallest mountain is Mount Everest, which is on the border between Nepal and Tibet.

　　11. Based on the recent decline in enrollment, the admissions office decided to reevaluate its recruitment strategies.

　　Based on ... enrollment: INCORRECT. 作为名词修饰语分词 based 修饰 admissions office. 然而，句子 本身的意思并非是 the admissions office 本身 is based on the recent decline in enrollment. 用短语 based on X 替代介词短语 because of 是错的, 因为 because of 可以修饰动词短语 decided to reevaluate.

　　Correction: Because of the recent decline in enrollment, the admissions office decided to reevaluate its recruitment strategies.

　　12. Unaccustomed to the rigors of college life, James's grades dropped.

　　Unaccustomed to... college life: INCORRECT. 作 为 名 词 修 饰 语 , 分 词 unaccustomed 修 饰 名 词 短 语; james's grades. 然而 unaccustomed 和明显是用于修饰 James 自己的， 如果要用名词修饰语开头必须要用 James 作主 语.

　　Correction: Unaccustomed to the rigors of college life, James allowed his grades to drop.

　　13. James returned the coat to the store, which was torn at one of the seams.

　　Which was ... the seams: INCORRECT. 该修饰语被放错地方了. Which 从句看似用来修饰 store, (相 邻名词); 可修饰语应该是修饰 coat 的. 因此，修饰语应临近 coat. 修饰语本身不长我们可以简单插入并加个逗号

　　Correction: James returned the coat, which was tom at one of the seams, to the store.

　　

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　　14. Last night our bed broke, which caused great consternation.

　　Which caused great consternation: INCORRECT. 该句为垂悬修饰语。句子本身不包含任何由 which caused great consternation 修饰的名词. 句子原意是对事件本身评价 (the breakdown of the bed).但主句本身没有任何名词主语. 因此我们需要把修饰语变成动词修饰语要么用分词 participle (causing ... ) 或者用 独立分词 absolute phrase (an event that caused ... ).

　　Correction: Last night our bed broke, causing great consternation.

　　15. The patient's rare disease was treated using novel techniques developed at the medical university.

　　Using novel techniques: INCORRECT. 该 句 为 垂 悬 修 饰 语, 句 子 本 身 不 包 含 任 何 由 using novel techniques 修饰的名词. 要改正该句，我们需要引进一个“who“ used the novel techniques (e.g., a doctor), 或者也可以变成不包含动词 ing 的介词短语比如 through the use of novel techniques